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Back to the Drawing Board!

This weekend I spent hours and hours reading for my thesis. I stumbled upon this book called “A Writer Teaches Writing” by Donald M Murray which made me really think about my writing process for my book but also for other stories. He breaks the process down as COLLECT PLAN DRAFT. The thing is, for his process, it’s not linear. It’s not just collect, plan, draft, DONE! It’s a revolving cycle until the final draft–meaning revision is just a rehash of the process. He refers to editing basically how I referred to correcting.

What does this mean? I’m re-thinking the Abassi Expedition. I’ve collected, planned, and drafted and now as I look at it–it doesn’t feel right. Something, mostly a fire, is missing from it for me. I think that I need some more collect, another plan, and another draft.

So, I’m probably going to collect my thoughts–break the draft down into the issues that I’m having, which for me, is primarily Alice and William at the end of the book. Morris grew into the most perfect character for me, save for maybe one or two scenes that feel forced. But Alice and William? They were planned before they were collected. So I’m back on the collect. I really want to better understand who they are, their backgrounds, how they’ll act as life comes at them. I had planned to be done with the Abassi Expedition by fall but honestly, I don’t know if that will happen.

After I collect, I’ll plan… I have legitimate scenarios for Alice and William to experience but I don’t think I have the right responses and actions on their part. So I might re-plan the rising and falling action. I like the climax, I like the end.

Then I’ll draft and when I do, I might use some old scenes but I also plan to use some techniques in that book like writing my lead over and over again in the different options (direct statement, anecdote, quotation  news, informing detail, dialogue, surprise, description, mood, face, scene, first person, third person, tension, problem, process, voice, second person, rhetorical question, background, introduction) with a focus on honesty, simplicity, immediacy, information, and voice.

I think it’s time for me to accept and be okay that my first draft is a discovery draft and it helped me to discover what I need to know, what I need to explore, what was left out. I have that draft off to my good friend Sabrina right now, so we’ll see what she says.

Another thing I’d like to do is to answer all the questions Murray gives that are more directed for non-fictional writing but still carry meaning to me:

  1. Do I have enough specific, accurate information to build a piece of writing that will satisfy the reader?
  2. Do I see an order in the material that will deliver information to the readers when they need it?
  3. DO I hear a voice that is strong enough to speak directly to the reader?
  4. What do I know about my story?
  5. What do I need to know?
  6. Do I need to expand or narrow my scope?
  7. Will my reader’s questions get answered?

Murray also gives some great ideas about keeping the writing going such as setting a quota and keeping score, writing in parts instead of focusing on the whole, don’t stop to look at notes.

Before I start any of that, I need to figure out what is working well in my draft. My prose is good, concise, to the point, active, but my characters aren’t working for me the way they should. They’re not in the story enough. This plot is driven by the characters and the story needs to reflect that.

To really assess my work, I need to read it thrice (YES THRICE!) for content, structure, and language. Lately, I’ve been reading, instead, for language. That’s just not working for me. Because I can fix the prose but if the content isn’t right, that means nothing!

SO, now where am I? Well, I’m mired in the collect for my thesis. So the Abassi Expedition will have to wait a few months (hopefully just until March) before I can really delve into it’s collect. But I have a few books that I’ve recommended but never *fully* read, I’m going to link them AGAIN and finally read them this time! Cover to cover!

  1. Make a Scene: Crafting a Powerful Story One Scene at a Time by Jordan E. Rosenfeld
  2. Word Hero: A Fiendishly Clever Guide to Crafting the Lines that Get Laughs, Go Viral, and Live Forever by Jay Heinrichs
  3. Plot Versus Character: A Balanced Approach to Writing Great Fiction by Jeff Gerke
  4. How to Write Science Fiction & Fantasy by Orson Scott Card
  5. New to my list: On Writing by Stephen King
  6. New to my list: 20 Master Plots: And How to Build Them by Ronald B. Tobias

If I can work these into my thesis, I may, but until then, I’m stuck reading books and articles about writers teaching writing (if you know any, pass them on!).

Don’t Over-think It

I got another scene done, that’s five! But it took a little bit because I was over-thinking it.

Here’s what happened:

My scene seemed kind of boring and I wanted to spruce it up so I read the dialogue chapter in Jordan E Rosenfeld’s Make a Scene and then I made notes and talked to my husband (who gave me the setting) and then I read the “Nice to Eat with You: Acts of Communion” chapter in Thomas C Foster’s How to Read Literature Like a Professor. All in all that was good but bad because then it seemed like this tornado of things I had to get done and they were all swirling as tornados are apt to do and then I just kept starting the scene and it kept sucking because windy tornadoes suck (true fact, I live in Oklahoma, I can be an expert on this).


SO I tried that “write it like a screenplay” idea I mentioned yesterday and bim, bam, boom, it came out of me like a slimy little fishy from a mommy fishy (no, they don’t all lay eggs, I think). So then it was quite easy to go back and add some more necessary parts. In the end, I liked it, I worked in a Peter Pan quote and reference to my Guy-Protagonist. It was a weird scene because I had to work it so that it made sense in lieu of some odd factors for example: M was asking W for something he had been against all their lives. Luckily, W is too cocky to think too long and hard on it. I eventually worked in everything I wanted to. I might work in during a revision an allusion to W’s future struggle.

The bottom line is I think of myself as an organic writer. I have a really hard time creating with such odd directions. I need to find a way for it to just flow from me. The planning helped but also hindered. So keep that in mind when you’re working on something. There are lots of books on how OTHER people do things, but in the end you’re not those people–you’re you and you have you’re own way of doing things. I like to read things and take them in like a plant taking in sunlight. If I try to force it, it’s like I’m trying to photosynthesize with fire–it just won’t work.

Scene Word Count: 1008 | Total Word Count: 5680

I also found this WONDERFUL word list that is amazingly useful when working on a dialogue chapter: Over 300 Ways to Say “Said”

How do you plan a scene? And what do you think of referencing other works of literature/film/art?

Getting Started

So, I’m writing a novel. I started it about a month ago and have been working on it off and on over the past month. I’m proud to say, thus far, I have two scenes written.

The genre is YA Sci-fi/Fantasy, subgenre is Steampunk. It’s set on another planet, Planet X as we’ll refer to it from now on. And it’s going to be told from 3 points of view. It’s a fun story so let’s break down some of the techniques and tools I’m using to write it…

First is Scrivener. This is a program that has a ton of features. You can try a free trial here: http://www.literatureandlatte.com/scrivener.php. The trial lasts about 30 days. I’ve had a lot of fun setting up my future manuscript (which helps with my excitement level) and really utilizing the cork-board feature. If you’re working on something that will be long, it’s great to use so that you can have everything together without crashing Word.

Second is this: POV Template. I am no genius so I can’t figure out how to allow YOU to use it, but I mostly wanted to convey the idea of what I was working with. I spent a lot of time with tables in word to create this, there are other ways–for example writing it out long hand. A lot of people use notecards (which I also do). The way I set my timeline up for Act 1. This way I keep track of my scenes, my POVs, and my timeline. It’s really firmly set, I can’t move it around without a little hassle, SO it makes doing it long hand a little easier. Anyway, I think it’s a great way to keep your story straight. I recommend it for every scene.

Last for today is a booklist: Plot Vs. Character by Jeff GerkeMake a Scene by Jordan RosenfeldWord Hero: A Fiendishly Clever Guide to Crafting the Lines that Get Laughs, Go Viral, and Live Forever by Jay Heinrichs, and The Art of War for Writers by James Scott Bell. I’m a bit of an organic writer and reader so typically I don’t do the exercises but this time, I am. These books are useless if you don’t actually DO what they suggest you do and to incorporating them into your writing. I also suggest reading a chapter and then writing 2-3 pages about the chapter, your thoughts on it, etc. That way you’re internalizing it more actively.

Please let me know about YOUR progress. I want this to be less of a Dear Diary and more of a dialogue and exchange with writers around the world.